Please Critique my Commission

Hi Gamingforce friends,

Please critique my commission that I did for a friend. I know the for BeetleGirl is kind of too large, and her thighs are big, but I would like to know to see a statistic of what is good and what is bad. I know some people like it, and some people don't.

Thanks for your help,

Bentoboxbobby ^^

Jam it back in, in the dark.

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Hi Gamingforce friends,

Please critique my commission that I did for a friend. I know the for BeetleGirl is kind of too large, and her thighs are big, but I would like to know to see a statistic of what is good and what is bad. I know some people like it, and some people don't.

Thanks for your help,

Bentoboxbobby ^^

The font you use is a pain to read.

You are actually getting paid for this? Not bad. Although there are some major issue with this piece. I am not sure what you are trying to communicate. The thing that jump out to me, is that the character seen to be falling over, even the guy standing in the back. So why are you having her bending to the right like that?

Second issue I have with the girl is that she doesn't seen to have much of a torso. Her mid section should be a little longer. Unlike the guy in the back, she is not grounded, that makes her pose a little less convincing.


There's nowhere I can't reach.

I love the style and teh colors, they are vividly beautiful. Kudos, everyone has a unique style.

This thing is sticky, and I don't like it. I don't appreciate it.

Hi Magi,

Thanks a lot for your great insight. I just like it when people critique honestly because it forces me to be a better artist.

The technical detail that you have inputted for me is marvelous, so I will copy what you had taught me what to do.

The beetle girl is actually levitating, I'm sorry about it being confusing. It was actually two drawings I did that were recycled.

The Beetle Girl I had drawn at least 10 years ago, and dug up. Then I superimposed the Corvette Guy with a drawing I did this year for a contest, but was never used.

Yeah, I know, the torso is whack, but its a great feeling to know my weaknesses because I like honesty.

Well, if you have any more suggestions, I'm welcome to them. Otherwise, I'm back to the drawing board.

Oh yeah, everyone tells me that I have to go back to school (like a community college) to do some figure drawing, and that is really true.

Since I was a student a long time ago at San Jose State, we did life drawing a lot. I really miss that.


By the way, I have a youtube account, and it's bentoboxbobbytv. I'm making this a reference site for every artist to get ideas. One day, I will use this in an art school like a curator.

Well, hope to keep in touch with you again.


Sincerely,
Bobby [/FONT]

I am a dolphin, do you want me on your body?