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 Member 12774 Level 31.07 Sep 2006 
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Well... I'd get the ball rolling, but it's my story, and I'd only be completely critical of it and point out all the flaws that I see every time I read it.
Anyone have anything at all to say?  How ya doing, buddy?  |
Member 12774 Level 31.07 Sep 2006
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Done - dunno if it converted everything properly, but it looked good at first glance.
There's nowhere I can't reach. |
Member 12774 Level 31.07 Sep 2006
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Three quick comments: one, I wrote this story before having even heard of Firefly. Two, the dialogue is almost word-for-word after playing it out in a roleplaying game (also titled Atlantis) ... yes, I realize that's NEVER a strong basis for dialogue. Three, I had to keep the story at or under 1,500 words when I wrote it, with a 150-word leeway given for overzealous people. Trying to take a two-year-long roleplaying campaign and condense it into 1,650 words is rather difficult
 That being said, I agree with just about everything you said, neus. Given those restrictions I should have picked different subject matter. If I had written a review of this piece, that would pretty much be exactly what I would say, except possibly even harsher, since I don't care about hurting my own feelings This thing is sticky, and I don't like it. I don't appreciate it. |
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