Does this sound correct?

"A humanoid cyborg is being resurrected by the power of mystic working hand in hand together with the digital force thus bringing upon us the age of Digital Mystic."

thanks!

Jam it back in, in the dark.

Do you mean grammatically? It looks correct, but sounds a little awkward; might be missing a comma after "force" too, but I'm not sure.

There's nowhere I can't reach.

It sounds incomplete and senseless. What's that for? Are you making a story?

This thing is sticky, and I don't like it. I don't appreciate it.

It's a video description. Maybe that's why.

I am a dolphin, do you want me on your body?

Sounds stupid.

I was speaking idiomatically.

Originally Posted by Elrasiel

"A humanoid cyborg is being resurrected by the power of mystic working hand in hand together with the digital force thus bringing upon us the age of Digital Mystic."

thanks!

It's very awkward. The one thing that stands out the most is that "humanoid cyborg" is redundant. A cyborg is an enhanced human (think The Borg from Star Trek).

"Hand in hand together" is also redundant.

Lastly "is being resurrected" doesn't agree in verb tense. The following still sounds a bit odd (probably because I don't know what the hell is going on), but I believe is grammatically correct.

--A cyborg is resurrected by the power of mystic. Working together with the digital force the age of Digital Mystic is upon us.

What kind of toxic man-thing is happening now?

Originally Posted by Elrasiel

"A humanoid cyborg is being resurrected by the power of mystic working hand in hand together with the digital force thus bringing upon us the age of Digital Mystic."

thanks!

Trying your hand at some more viral marketing for your shit Windows Live Spaces site?



FELIPE NO

These might appear to be a little less cumbersome.

"A humanoid cyborg is being resurrected by the power of mystic. They are working hand in hand together with the digital force thus bringing upon us the age of Digital Mystic."

"A humanoid cyborg is being resurrected by the power of mystic, working hand in hand together with the digital force thus bringing upon us the age of Digital Mystic."

What, you don't want my bikini-clad body?

Originally Posted by RainMan

These might appear to be a little less cumbersome.

"A humanoid cyborg is being resurrected by the power of mystic. They are working hand in hand together with the digital force thus bringing upon us the age of Digital Mystic."

"A humanoid cyborg is being resurrected by the power of mystic, working hand in hand together with the digital force thus bringing upon us the age of Digital Mystic."

Thanks alot!

Jam it back in, in the dark.

Well, it looks like you got your answer. For future reference, this was better suited for a journal entry or something, it's pretty thin reasoning to launch a discussion thread to proof read a single sentence out of context.

There's nowhere to go from here, closing this now.

There's nowhere I can't reach.