Does this sound correct?
 

"A humanoid cyborg is being resurrected by the power of mystic working hand in hand together with the digital force thus bringing upon us the age of Digital Mystic."

thanks!

Do you mean grammatically? It looks correct, but sounds a little awkward; might be missing a comma after "force" too, but I'm not sure.

It sounds incomplete and senseless. What's that for? Are you making a story?

It's a video description. Maybe that's why.

Sounds stupid.

It's very awkward. The one thing that stands out the most is that "humanoid cyborg" is redundant. A cyborg is an enhanced human (think The Borg from Star Trek).

"Hand in hand together" is also redundant.

Lastly "is being resurrected" doesn't agree in verb tense. The following still sounds a bit odd (probably because I don't know what the hell is going on), but I believe is grammatically correct.

--A cyborg is resurrected by the power of mystic. Working together with the digital force the age of Digital Mystic is upon us.

Trying your hand at some more viral marketing for your shit Windows Live Spaces site?

http://spcows.ae2t.net/kareha/src/1182794268585.jpg

These might appear to be a little less cumbersome.

"A humanoid cyborg is being resurrected by the power of mystic. They are working hand in hand together with the digital force thus bringing upon us the age of Digital Mystic."

"A humanoid cyborg is being resurrected by the power of mystic, working hand in hand together with the digital force thus bringing upon us the age of Digital Mystic."

Thanks alot! :p

Well, it looks like you got your answer. For future reference, this was better suited for a journal entry or something, it's pretty thin reasoning to launch a discussion thread to proof read a single sentence out of context.

There's nowhere to go from here, closing this now.