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Help with a story
I've currently been assigned to write a short story, or short story-in-the-works, divided into three sections. The first section sets up the main character, the tone, and the setting. The second section progresses the story forward using dialogue and action. The third section is the climax, twist, or turning point.
I finally decided what I want to write today and would like to see what people think. So far, I've just typed the first paragraph.
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You could stand to not be so ambiguous about the settings your story will take place in. Does the 'naked city' have a name? What is the name of the restaurant? Does he know anyone inside the restaurant? While it's fine to leave details of other people inherently vague if they aren't important, doing the same to the environment makes the story bland and unimaginative. Obviously you can't take the time to create a fully fleshed out world in a short story, so you need to be certain that whatever imagry you use will be potent enough to make up for that lacking.
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I actually like the vague setting, or the "ambiguity" as it has been defined. I like how you say, "everything looks pretty typical, so why is there an extra puzzle piece to an already solved puzzle?" That's interesting. I like it when writers/artists keep the attention to the subject by not going in to detail of what is not important. Keep your flats and rounders separated.
Now I get skeptical with the idea of a paranormal detective. It is tricky, because of the sheer amount of loopholes that come out of the woodwork. I don't want to discourage, but just know what you might be heading in to. Most amazing jew boots
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