GFF Literary Workshop: Trial Week 1

I just read through Never Born and I wanted to add a few of my thoughts.

My feelings towards the story pretty much echo everyone else's: the beginning was gripping but a lot of detail felt missing around the middle and especially the end.

I think it's a good spin on the concept of wishing you were never born, and the benefit of total anonymity could prove to be a wonderful asset in a crime fighting, vigilante scenario. Actually I was kind of hoping that that was the direction it was headed, and in the end Howard would've become a crime fighter.

One thing that seemed really vague was that Professor's role in everything. His experiments had negative side effects, but what does that mean? Is he trying to clone babies to make an army of mutants? Is he creating a super bug in an effort to wipe out a race of people?
I guess what I'm trying to say is that I wasn't really clear on the reasons why he had to be stopped.

All in all it wasn't a bad short story. And considering that yours is the first story in this Workshop, I think you did a good job. I just think that for the next story you write, you should spend some time fleshing out the narrative a bit more.

Jam it back in, in the dark.