Jessykins' Writing Thread...

Is back! Once more I bring to you my THREAD OF WRITING!

This time I am going to try and organize them by character, for ease of browsing. Updates will be bolded or something. Maybe a color. I dunno. Anyway, let's do this shit.

Too many dead links. Gonna have to fix this shit at some point.

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First off: Vemp, I love you too.

Second off: I really have trouble picking my FAVORITE story. If anything, it'd probably be one of my Lilael stories.

Third off: MAGI HOLY FUCKING CRAP. THAT'S AWESOME. MARRY ME.

There's nowhere I can't reach.

I am editing the shit out of the main post to make it a bit easier to work with. Hopefully this will make people give a shit more.

As if!

Oh yeah, and this is the picture Magi did (It's from the end of Business as Usual):



This thing is sticky, and I don't like it. I don't appreciate it.

I've written another Rue story. Fetch it here.

I am a dolphin, do you want me on your body?

Originally Posted by neus

I hate how you break so many rules of writing and yet the story works, the characters are believable and everything fits.

I appreciate the compliment, but could you help me out here and tell me what rules I'm breaking?

Also, Schadenfreude, I'm glad you enjoyed that story. There was going to be a lot more to it, but I just can't seem to buckle down and do it. Mostly because I sort of forgot where I was going to end up with it. Whoops.

I was speaking idiomatically.

I am shamelessly bumping my thread in anticipation of a new story. If you see this, read my old shit.

What kind of toxic man-thing is happening now?

Alright, punks. Added a second part to Guilty Conscience. You can find it in the main post, or if you're a lazy fuck, right here.

FELIPE NO

Your feelings are noted, however, I disagree. I'd also like to point out that the way you present your opinions comes off as very condescending, and I don't appreciate it. Either way, thanks for even bothering to read something at all.

What, you don't want my bikini-clad body?

Originally Posted by Fatt

Never listen to this. Of course, that is coming from a big fan of Bukowski. Colorful language can be a form of art when used in context.

And here I thought I was the only on! Bukowski, I'll admit, has influenced me in a few ways (dialogue included), because he's exactly the type of person many of these characters is. Just angry and stuck in a shitty situation.

Also, yeah, the ending to the Feeling is Mutual doesn't really please me either, heh. I think I sort of ran out of steam and just wanted to get it over with.

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I've actually heard of and wanted to see that a lot. Not too long ago I'd downloaded a cassette-ripped copy of him reading a bunch of his poems/stories, and it was incredible to me to hear how tired and just beat down he'd sounded. I mean, reading the stuff is one thing, but when read by him it was something else.

I'll definitely look into watching that documentary.

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Did I say that?

Either way, awesome. I love fanart!

This thing is sticky, and I don't like it. I don't appreciate it.

I'm glad to hear that. I've never thought of my stuff as "inspiring", so I'm flattered.. I guess?

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Originally Posted by whinehurst

She doesn't have to keep going back to the redhead - she could just leave.

Sorry for focusing only on this one line, but I suppose it's really just something that I've been asked a lot (about the character/myself). She doesn't HAVE to keep going back, right? Unless, of course, she's SO desperate for any sort of affection or attention that she'll go crawling back to the one who'd give it to her, even if it's negative. I think the fact that she's going back pretty much shows the depths of her self esteem issues quite well. In the end, the murder, really, was something of an act of bravery and strength on her part, but not really. Strength would've been finding the ability to resist the urge to succumb and see her. Instead she took the coward's way out and just eliminated the temptation from her life.

Either way, thanks for the observations, to be honest I feel bad that I haven't been given Lilael as much attention as Rue, but writing Lil can be a little too personal sometimes, and leaves me feeling weird afterward.

How ya doing, buddy?

That's the funny thing, too. I enjoy writing first person more. Although, I think the fact that I don't do it enough is why it seems lacking in comparison. Either way, thanks for the compliments and observations. I do plan to do some more Lilael work in the future. Hopefully the not-too-distant future.

What kind of toxic man-thing is happening now?

Originally Posted by Nahual

I wish I could write better...maybe it's time to go to college.
later!.

I didn't even graduate high school, in fact. Only so much can be taught. If you want to be a good writer, just write. Write and read a LOT.

Also, I'm glad you liked my stories. Please read more and tell me what you think.

FELIPE NO

You actually SHOULD read that, as it establishes Rue and Eddie as characters. It's something of a starter story I guess. The thing is, it's a stand alone story, but there was supposed to be a second part (with a different name) that I don't plan to do.

What, you don't want my bikini-clad body?

Originally Posted by Magi

I have to admit, I am a slow reader, I finally gotten around to read just another job, and I'll have to say, I like Lilael better then Rue. >.> She seem to be person of good humor but contemplative. For some reason I can imaging her having more variant expression wise compare to Rue, which I had always feel to be stoic.

Pretty good observation of them, Magi. I'm glad I got that across with Lil and Rue. Sadly, Lil doesn't get the kind of attention Rue does, but I plan to give her some very soon!

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New story time! At last, Lilael gets some more attention in the first part of a story that will not only jump to Rue, but also establish Alec Burnside as a future contender for stories of his own.

Fetch it HERE! Or in the main post, as always.

Comments are appreciated. I took a lot of my first person criticism to heart, so I hope this one is a little bit more in depth. I hope. It's also been a while.

There's nowhere I can't reach.

That's actually sort of the point. After seeing a certain amount of bodies, it really just stops being that surprising. Glad you liked it though.

This thing is sticky, and I don't like it. I don't appreciate it.

Originally Posted by Bradylama

Is it Ringu?

I still can't relate to the whole lesbian protagonist thing, but goddamn it if you haven't gotten the whole world and its characters down pat.

Dialogue is also great, as usual, and the ending left on a light and depressing note.

Thumbs up all around, you fucking dyke.

A review in only the way you can give it, Brad. Thanks.

Also, Vemp, MAYBE? I think you know what must be done!

How ya doing, buddy?

Thanks for reading, Nahual. I hope you enjoy my other stories as well. Be sure to tell me what you think.

I was speaking idiomatically.

Well, fuck. This thread is kind of boned until I can find new hosting for my stories. EX-girlfriend deleted all my shit.

What kind of toxic man-thing is happening now?

Okay, all better. New story coming soonish.

FELIPE NO

Oh dear, it seems that a new story has been written.

Get it HERE or the opening post.

This story takes place after Lilael's last story, btw.

(Also, this is pretty much very violent. I was in a mood to write some gore. I promise I'll bring some REAL stories back eventually)

What, you don't want my bikini-clad body?

I hope you see what I mean when I said there's a great scene at the end for you to DRAW FOR ME. WINK WINK.

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