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 Member 27 Level 61.14 Mar 2006 
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http://www.gamingforce.org/forums/se...tty-poems.html
I can think of no better way to sum up my reaction. Jam it back in, in the dark.  John Mayer just asked me, personally, through an assistant, to sing backup on his new CD. |
Member 27 Level 61.14 Mar 2006
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The man is sort of right. The form is flawed, the word usage is very high school. And the guy above, who said put more emotion into it, doesn't know writing at all. Poetry, even prose poetry, is not strictly about emotion. It's also about finding a way to use repetition, and form, and structure in order to put that sort of emotion on the plate and still make it usable. You have some talent with words, sure, but you need to refine it. I'd recommend joining a writing group, or taking some classes so you can actually do something other than just write a poem that looks like it would show up in Season 1 of Buffy the Vampire Slayer.
There's nowhere I can't reach. John Mayer just asked me, personally, through an assistant, to sing backup on his new CD. |
No. Hard Pass.