Hello! I want some opinions about my novel in progress...

While this isn't my typical genre of choice, I thought it was pretty intriguing after the initial explanatory introduction but to be fair, I usually skim through prologues and introductions anyway.

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I thought the initial paragraphs sounded a bit like you were ranting. Particularly this passage:

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Of course, who cares for a planet? It only supplies the every need, fills the every want, and gives all else it has to offer. Who cares? It’s not as if it will ever STOP giving. It isn’t as if it will ever have nothing left to sacrifice for its greedy children. It’s not as if it won’t turn against them without knowing.

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Claudius had been in love with her the moment that he saw her. Her flowing blonde hair, her thin red lips, the way her flowing dress curved around her fragile yet healthy figure all helped him on his pathway to romance.

I don't know if this is a personal preference but I tend to stray from using the same adjective within a sentence.

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“I saw her first, she’s mine!” Claudius had argued.
“But I’m the king!” Alexander with his snotty little attitude hurled at his brother.
“I’m older!” Claudius once again had the upper hand.
“And I am the king whom you will obey!” Alexander shouted, ending the conversation.

Claudius is supposed to be older yet he sounds as if he is the same age as Alexander. Since later on you state that the king is spoiled this is fine, but Claudius is supposed to be "evil" and menacing and should respond as such. Unless this occurred when they were children. If it is, a time frame should be established.

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Claudius didn’t understand women. Even more plainly, who does? He didn’t understand. She often flirted with him, but he thought she was only joking. She would sit in his lap and talk to him about how much she different things such as why they should have more color options for carpet and whether or not they stood a chance of being the dominant race of the universe.

Did you mean, "She would sit in this lap and talk to him about different things such as..."?

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It was pure folly. She was the Queen and Empress of the Planet Gaia and all her Surrounding Moons, and he was simply the Heir Presumptive, soon to be the worm that worms into that comfortable chair that conveniently comes with a Golden Diadem.

I rather liked that line. My only concern is the word repetition (worm, worms).

Not really a critique but you spelled “Eusophonice” as “Eusophanice” the last two times. Which is it?

So yea, I’d be interested in seeing where you go with this.

Jam it back in, in the dark.