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EDIT: My review of Neverborn... It was an interesting read at the beginning, but became boring and rushed toward the end. There was no conflict or struggle - morally or physically, really. It was just like "Hm... here's the problem, here's the solutions that have already been tried, and here's the solution that ends it. The end." There's not much emotional connection to any of the characters, even the protagonist.
The idea is great, the story is great, it just needs to be expanded upon tenfold, as everyone else has already iterated, in so many words.
Also, sentence structure could use a bit of work (for example, "He left the bar intending to stop a scientific genius who he'd help lose funding." Awkward and unwieldy. Since you describe the situation anyway in the next paragraph, you might consider leaving it fairly open-ended, like "He left the bar, his mind and intention focused on finding one very specific man: a self-proclaimed scientific genius." I also debate the "genius" part since obviously he wasn't that smart, causing accidents and such.)
And please for the love of all that is literate, don't use abbreviations such as "Prof." for Professor!
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