GFF Literary Workshop: Week 8

Well, I don't really know what to comment, since the story itself isn't yet finished. Just a few I think.

I don't really know about others, but I feel that this story lacks conflict. I feel bland reading it, since like what Dark Nation has already mentioned, you talk about the mask so often that I'm confused whether the mask is the main issue or about Adrian and her strange situation. I even thought that I was reading about a documentary story rather than a fictious one. The plot is weak, I must admit, and it looks like that if no mends is made, this story could go off the tracks.

About the characters, I don't really feel anything between them, as if they were only two strangers bumping on the streets and spoke a bit as formality, and then left. Not enough impressions are put into the conversation, resulting in no expectations that Adrian and Eugene are best friends. Looks like they were only discussing about the mask.

I can't comment about the connectivity, since the story hasn't finished. So, try the best to mend your story and I'm waiting for the rest.

P.S.: I almost assumed this is a gay story since I thought that Adrian's a guy. Sorry^^

Jam it back in, in the dark.