Please give comments to these.

Hello, I made lots of poems myself, and I'm thinking of publishing them. But before that, I need some critics and comments about them. here I post some of them, which are inspired by some classical musics.

Please read them throughly, and give me your comments and critics for each one of them. don't hesitate on saying something, but please don't make it too harsh.

Enjoy!

PRELUDE:

Song of a prayer
Fades away in time
My part has ended
Now reality comes
Phenomenon of life
To the third finale
And to be reborn again
In the quiet sea of teal

ROCKETS:

Unlimited
Unexpected
Unreachable
Unpredictable
Unforgetable

Attacking the far blue sky above our heads
That is millions of light above
Fulfill the sacred duty of the bravehearts
Which may not be the right ones for us

Listen to your words
Ignore all others
And be independent
Out of bounds

Rockets of my life
Fly me to the moon
Lose me away from my agendas
And go bewitch all audiences
So I'll be holy

Slaves of my dreams
Form me a wavelet
Crash the path
Mate souls

(fusees...)

LANDSCAPES:

Eyes of the earth
With the breath of the wind
Bravery over pain
Admiring the plain loneliness
In open airs

Around the galaxies
To find the nature
By the power of instinct
And become leaves

I come from the farthest place
To go to an even farther one
Just to be with you

Go away
Get used to the scenes
And solve the puzzle
In the red of roses
With morning dew
And midnight rain
And evening dusk

Scream in glory
So full in gorgeous

Lend me your aura
So I can feel this beauty
To create another forest of silence

Landscapes, landscapes of freedom
Put on your scarf of emerald
And bless me with your kindness

I'll pray for you...now

WILL-O'-THE-WISP:

Blue light, faint dull light
Anywhere to be seen
High time, fly low
Dying away in the middle of the night

Mighty courage in loneliness
In company only about five
To be gone, free fly, free fly
Mode[d] low profile

Misty weather and go around
Darkness lightens yet still to be
Hopes are lost, free love, free love
Questioning the limit of ray of light
Questioning the limit of total darkness
Swarm alone, yet few, but still alone

Blue light, yet not light of hope
Come along paths but not to guide
Die in pitch black, lonesome times
And there to vanish, there there be gone

Troubles ahead not to be known
Gloom in the middle of the rain
A not so free life, free life
Questioning the break of dawn
Questioning the break of limits
Endless sorrow of disappearance

Holy light and unholy light
Projecting dreams and illusion
To be erased and then be restored
A glimpse of empathy in a blink of eye

Blue light, faint blue light
Anywhere to be seen
High time, fly low
Speak the truth, will-o'-the-wisp...

VISION:

Breezy little evening
All I watch in my near future
On a golden saddle in
Rippling calm water
When rain touches the ground
Like my tears in pain
Wind chimes tingling
Stars twinkling
And opals shimmering
'They' keep sending me a sirene
That keeps me feeling sorry
Serene, benign, and solemn

I'm a living alarm
With seconds lost within
Waiting time to forgive
A doll without a soul
A ghost in the shell
A servant with no master
But I was stranded
In the middle of a misty road
Can't see too faraway
I know something's out there
I know that
Makes me prepare it well
A vision...

HEROIC:

Have your legs bring you to the frontline
And let your melody of stomping feet be heard away
Send your blood and soul to the underworld
TO BE OR NOT TO BE

WILD HUNT:

I ran away
I ran away one day
Too bad it was one fine day
I went away to nowhere
As far as I could
So no one could catch me
I wasn't a fugitive
Not even once
I was also not a criminal
Not even once
Why did they chase me?
I was still running...
From those hands
away from my fate
And I was the last victim
A chase had occured
The said I was the last
Though they acted as I was the beginning
run, run, run, run
hide, hide, hide, hide
kill, kill, kill, kill
The mini game of hide-and-seek had started
But a bit tricky
With the bet of my life
I told you so
The wild hunt began
Until eternity
And I would keep running
Until stars cried
And my body decomposed
Into soil, dirt, and blood
Feeling the taste of loneliness itself
So I would be free
Free..
run, run, run...
hide, hide, hide...
kill...

RECOLLECTION:

I was there
I've been there
Once in the lifetime
And twice in my otherside
I'd been there
And wished to be there again
To there...
But that day never came

You was there
You've been there
Once in the lifetime
And twice in your otherside
You'd been there
And I wished you'd come with me
To there...
But you weren't there

My memories
My feelings
And my secrets
I'm passionate to go
Be there and be gone tomorrow
With the cyclone as my vehicle

You never came...
You never come...

PASSIONATE:

Faraway steps
Impossible things
Stars in water
The sky fades
Calls of nature
Language of truth
My heart calling you
And you call for me
I forget our song
Do you resent it?
Splashing wild emotion

Running towards you
My heart feels like exploding
Too much to keep inside
A luster inside

Twilight and dawn
shivering laws
Rivers of east
Bells ringing loud
Crows and ravens
Like a stone
I'm one with you
And you are one with me
Of all traits
Above everything
Deep silent ocean

I long for you
Yet you are beyond all
My life is for you
I'm done for you

So far
So near
So far...
So near...
Passionate...

EVENING HARMONIES:

Evening harmonies...
(La la la la...)
Up over the horizon
The sky gradually turns red
painted by the sun
(La la la la...)
The angel choir sings
The demon campaign applauses
In the dust of clouds
Flying to the north
And return home
(La la la la...)
Dusk is coming far
And faith is tested
Testament to be
Or not to be
(La la la la...)
Dawn to be welcomed
With white crows
And black doves
(La la la la...)
Con-fess-s-s. ..
Day-dre-e-e- e-a-a-am- ...
(La la la la...)
Fairies of rose
An ice of crystal
Face of the sun
End the night
Desert terror
Four-leaved clover
Love's on the air
A perfect match
Farther to go
(La la la la...)
Unplug all the ears
Upclose all the eyes
Join the angel carnivale
Blow the cold squall
(La la la la...)
Like a fresh spring
And bouncing away
Away...
Being a crimson sea
Sea...
And azure sky
Sky...
(La la la la...)
Azure sky
Crimson sea
Maroon field
And grey snow
(La la la la...)
Sing from your heart
Link it with your soul
You're frozen
Right when it's over
(La la la la...)
Evening harmonies...
Evening harmonies...
Evening harmonies...

SNOW SQUALL:

All alone in loneliness
Feeling blue of the black sky
Only charcoal burning free
My heart is throtted
Hate to lose all the might
But no honesty left
An empty case proves all
Cold freezing night
No light of hope above
And I'm trapped in the middle of a storm
Swallows come and go
Season's call
Without a sign of summer
All alone in darkness
Wishing to break free to the vanilla sky
But my wings are bound to fate
Endangered
And imprisoned
No friens or courage
And I have no prayer left for this
This tempest beneath my heart
Keeps blowing
Keep it down
Please unlock this key of my soul
And let go
For a bigger prize, alone
I spawned the view
As a result, I lose everything that I just gained
Beneath those thick snow and blue fields
I could only pondred while being stuck in this blizzard
I could only sleep
And dream
That the sky will turn warm
That this snow squall will stop
Stop...

Jam it back in, in the dark.