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ComradeTande Dec 1, 2008 10:56 PM

This is what I do at work (comic strips!)
 
It's been outrageously slow at work nowadays, so I get away with doodling on paper. Me and a coworker have started a small comic, or well, I draw he just writes whatever he damn pleases in the bubbles.
So, here we go. Might have to squint to read some of it, his handwriting kinda sucks.

http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/b...thechinese.jpg

http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/b...godiahhrea.jpg

http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/b...mTan/whore.jpg

Zephyrin Dec 2, 2008 11:56 PM

The influence of GFF has served you well.

Crash "Long-Winded Wrong Answer" Landon Dec 3, 2008 03:07 AM

This is not newspaper friendly.

It seems somewhat disaffected, mostly because I don't sense a lot of cohesion between each strip. Three samples isn't a ton to go on, granted. How much do you know about your characters? What is the purpose of their existence? Basically, what's it all about?

Visually, I like the basic body designs. The skinny leg thing works. Stronger differentiations between heads will be necessary though. I gather these are rough sketches, so I'll just hope any final versions will have cleaner lines, standardized fonts and better page structure. I think you may need to experiment with stronger visual contrasts in the designs and line thicknesses. It really makes certain characters and settings pop. If it's meant to be a webcomic, you're not confined to the dimensional limits of a newspaper page, so there's no reason not to add more visuals when able. It needn't be excessive but they do add a lot and describe settings in a way that allows you to conserve word space for edgier humor.

Show me more and I'll see what can be done with it. You may wanna seek out Dubble and ask his opinion too.

ComradeTande Dec 3, 2008 11:36 AM

Yeah, these were all just rough drafts drawn at work on butcher paper (not kidding).
I'll doodle some stuff up after work on my wacom and hopefully get something that's a bit...more professional.

FatsDomino Dec 3, 2008 12:16 PM

More soup please. :)

ComradeTande Dec 4, 2008 02:11 AM

Two main characters so far, I know I suck at colouring, I would probably do cross hatching instead for normal, and probably leave the colouring to special episodes.

http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/b...racterlawl.jpg
http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/b...iumTan/sam.jpg

Crash "Long-Winded Wrong Answer" Landon Dec 5, 2008 02:15 AM

Just for kicks, I decided to draw your character myself. I tried to remain as true to your style as I could but little bits of mine show through. My tablet's not connected so I just did it with whatever pen was lying around. Here's what I wound up with:


Not too bad for about five minutes.

ComradeTande Dec 5, 2008 09:23 AM

Very cute, crash, although needs to be more anorexic skinny I think, lol. I was probably gonna crosshatch like that for the final drafts of the comics too :3

New character:
http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/b...orrorflikc.jpg

and rough drafts from last night:
http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/b.../dysentery.jpg
http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/b...Tan/cheese.jpg
http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/b...an/lolwuto.jpg
apparently that song is all about masturbating...? And I didn't know.

Seris Dec 10, 2008 10:41 AM

I know these are just doodles you do while you're bored at work, but I do have one recommendation for you and you can feel free to dismiss it since this is something you do entirely out of leisure: try and give your comics more of a sense of structure when you make them.

Like, say, instead of having word bubbles and panels floating around on your paper there, you could measure out each panel beforehand and plan out your dialog in a separate sheet of paper so you could fit the words in their bubbles accordingly.

Otherwise, it's a good start to something. Keep it up. POST MORRRE

The_Melomane Dec 13, 2008 10:59 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Seris (Post 665977)
I know these are just doodles you do while you're bored at work, but I do have one recommendation for you and you can feel free to dismiss it since this is something you do entirely out of leisure: try and give your comics more of a sense of structure when you make them.

Like, say, instead of having word bubbles and panels floating around on your paper there, you could measure out each panel beforehand and plan out your dialog in a separate sheet of paper so you could fit the words in their bubbles accordingly.

Otherwise, it's a good start to something. Keep it up. POST MORRRE

She actually draws them and then a co-worker puts in random conversation. Her comics that are actually purposeful--as in she planned them and they were more than doodles--were a lot better.


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