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My Lyrics and Music
Now, for a few years now I've embarked on creating hip hop music (more so rapping as my talents in producing are that of none). Now, before you turned away and say "Oh, Eww rap lyrics", I consider my lyrics to border on Poetry with heavy use of surrealism. Anyways, check them out and tell me what you think.
Not An Intro: Listen Here Lyrics on that page for those interested! Casually Crude: Listen Here Lyrics on that page for those interested Old stuff: Say Goodbye: Listen Here Spoiler:
Conscious: Listen Here Spoiler:
Mentality: Spoiler:
Roses: New! Spoiler:
And if your interested in those, I have more stuff here. Lyrics, Freestyle and other various things. |
Well, no one can tell him he has to leave forever, anyway...
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Don't we already have a black guy spouting shitty rhymes on this board?
Oh, in all seriousness, keep on trucking Contracts. Besides, I have no idea whether or not you're black. |
His lyrics aren't BAD. They're not great, either though. They just don't go anywhere which is my problem with rap today. It doesn't go anywhere.
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I don't mind the lyrics so much, but I think you should branch off towards poetry, and no more of this 'rap' stuff. You sound like a 15 year old white boy trying to sound black, and it just sounds awkward. But your writing isn't that bad. I can see some potential there. Just get away from the cliche themes. Also, your rhyme isn't so bad, but learn some meter =P
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I read all of them actually.
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The rhyme scheme is nice and technical.. that along with your sig tell me you're an underground head. ^_^
Granted that there is a certain level of depth to your lyrics, I must agree with Divest in saying that they don't go anywhere. Keep at it. |
Just bumping this, as I've added links to the audio form of "Say Goodbye" and added a new piece called "Roses". I changed up my style, to incorporate a more "story" focused appeal, regardless if it doesn't sound (look) like it, there is an overlying story and message. I worked heavily with metaphors, definitely different from my other stuff. Regardless, any thoughts and/or opinions would be great. Thanks
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You just started rapping - I can tell. Just by reading your lyrics, they aren't bad, rhyme scheme is actually pretty good, but as a rapper, it ain't just about the rhyming. Your flow and delivery are just horrid, but it's something that's gonna come with time.
If you wanna be an emcee, just keep droppin'. |
Night Phoenix, I took some of your words into consideration. A long with a lot of other people, and since then I've been fine tuning my stuff and I guess I can say with confidence I sound significantly better then the previous tracks posted.
Just bumping, I have those two new tracks up above - with beats provided by producers who are now willing to give/make me beats. |
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